Argument Peer Reviews

          I think the paper is going well because he uses a lot of information and he is able to point out the problems among his people and explain why terrorist groups such as ISIS are not a part of the Muslim people. An important part that really separated the real terrorist from the Muslim religion was when he mentioned that ISIS also kills other Muslims. This shows that not all Muslims are terrorists and that they are some out there who don’t belong. He brings up peace a lot which completely shows the contradiction between the real Muslims and the terrorists groups. Another point that he brings up is when he talks about how the Western countries make Muslims look bad. Through the news, people are easily influenced on what they hear over the news. Just because many of the ISIS members are Muslim doesn’t mean that they should all be treated like terrorists. In the essay, he also brings up a lot of quotes from the Islamic religion. This is important to explain because it proves many Western beliefs. People in the West believe that the Islamic religion promotes violence and crime from only knowing about ISIS, but in reality, the Islamic religion promotes peace and happiness. Overall, I think he is doing a good job getting his point across that heavily goes against racism and stereotypes of Muslims. I feel like there is a lot of good points but my only problem with his paper is that it might be a little difficult coming up with genuine counter arguments considering many non-Islamic people won’t understand the religion and its people.

 

          I think the paper about the SAT is well put together and brings a lot of good points that goes against college admissions. The SAT is a topic that can be debated on for hours because of controversial its worth is. I feel like the essay would attract and un attract many different kinds of readers. It would attract people who go against the SAT and read about its problems, but it may un attract people who already took the SAT or people who agree with it. Many people could argue that the SAT has already been implemented in the college application for such a long time that if they changed it, people would feel left out, many books and jobs would be wasted, and there really isn’t a better solution than just completely removing it. Back to the paper, she brings up a lot of good points especially mentioning how preparing and signing up for the SAT can be expensive. Overall, I think the topic is a good choice because its debatable, with many different pros and cons for both sides. My only problem with the paper is that she spends the entire time bashing the SAT, but never brings up a better idea or replacement. Either way, she brings up a lot of good information and points that strengthens her argument.

 

         While reading the New Jersey paper, I caught myself smiling at certain points considering he brought up New York. I was able to relate considering I’ve spent my whole life living in New York. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading the paper because he brought up many good points to defend New Jersey. As someone who has been around New York and New Jersey, I know exactly what he was talking about when he mentioned bagels, potholes, and rudeness among our people. One of his strongest points has to be when he brought up all of the stereotypically negatives of people who live in New Jersey. He mentions that driving on the New Jersey highways is an experience like no other and that drivers from around the area are just different from everyone else. I also liked how he used personal narrative to make readers understand that the New Jersey area isn’t as bad it seems. Bringing up a cool experience like meeting Michael Vick when he was on the Jets is pretty interesting and reaches out to the audience. My only negative I have about the paper is that he is missing a conclusion to wrap his paper up, but other than that, with his strong points and relatable topics, his paper can change the opinions of people who dislike New Jersey.