Thursday, September 17, 2015

Group's Personal Narrative Essay Reviews


          Starting with Monica’s Personal Narrative essay, I personally enjoyed reading it. I can’t relate to obtaining a job in high school but I can relate to the stress and becoming independent. I can also relate to losing contact with friends and mustering enough courage to confront a family member you’re not in good terms with. I’m sure other people could relate to her story better than I can. I feel like she went in depth with her stories and explained her feelings and thoughts as certain events were happening. She was very descriptive in her stories and allowed me to picture her situations such as the awkward car ride with her mom. I personally felt scared for her when she writes about the part on how she made her mom drive her to the job interview at Red Lobster but the first Red Lobster they went to was not there anymore. If she can make the reader feel the way she feels at a certain part in the story, it allows the author to connect to their audience. In the beginning, I wasn’t really sure what her story was about, but that’s not a bad thing. Not only does her story conveys independence, but also overcoming struggles, determination, courage, and putting family first. Overall, I thought it was great story telling, relatable, and contained powerful messages in which readers of this essay can take in.

          With Anthony’s Personal Narrative Essay, I thought it was an interesting read. His story contains a different stories and experiences that all had to do with ice cream. I too, enjoy ice cream myself and I’m sure the love of ice cream is relatable to a lot of people. To start, his story had different voices through the course of the reading. In the beginning, he tells a story about when he was at a very young age so his voice in that part seemed to be young and wild. In the middle of his story, he mentions having girlfriends but is able to keep his story still about ice cream. In this part, I found it funny and had me grinning to myself. But at the end, around the conclusion, he gets in a more serious tone and explains that ice cream can bring people together. He shows his audience that he learned that ice cream isn’t just about the food but a common interest that can be shared with others. Not only was his story about bringing people together with ice cream, but I personally feel like he was growing up as the story progressed. His story started at a young age and ended with him in or just out of high school. Overall, I thought his story was both funny and serious and his thoughts on ice cream are a great way to draw his audience in.

          Finally, with Jacob’s Personal Narrative, I really enjoyed his story. His story can be really relatable to readers as many kids in their young age are willing to spend more time with their friends than their family. I can relate to this because at a young age, I would always be eager to leave the house and spend time with my friends. I liked how descriptive he was during the car accident scene. He couldn’t provide much background information because in reality, he couldn’t remember anything and woke up in a hospital. I can relate to this because 2 years ago, I had a seizure in my sleep and woke up in an ambulance with no prior knowledge to what just happened.  At the end of the story, he finally realizes that his family is very important to him and should spend as much as time as possible with them.  My only criticism I have for his story is to change his story from a 3rd person view to a 1st person view, but otherwise, I really enjoyed reading his story.

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